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IDK about this game... the renders are nice, well laid out environment, a lot of the animations are nicely done (Rebecca getting into the hot tub) and the plot/storyline is workable overall, but there's a few things that start to make it boring fast:

- The MC acts like an extreme super-prude beta pansy.  I get that these are supposed to be his step-daughters, but they're also all grown women.  Being all uncomfortable seeing a bit of skin, or even talking about it? Making a very lame promise to an ex that cheated on you?  Seriously?  Is he 9 years old mentally?  His character begs the question: How did he even get married or laid at all? Beyond boring.

-  If you're only going to offer one option to choose from, ie: 'hang up' (the phone), there really nothing to 'choose' at all.  Totally unnecessary.

- In a couple instances, the choices literally mean nothing, as the story basically tells you your choice sucked and goes with the other option anyways.  Would be a lot different if it was funny, but it ends up being the opposite.

- Dialog, in some instances, is drawn out way too long.  Sometimes 'short and sweet' helps keep the interest level up, especially when it really has no impact in the game anyways.

Ultimately IDK if I'll see it through if it's just more of the same.

It's got promise, but it seems a lot of the renders in this chapter are not POV style, but random angles / third person narrative style (like in the restaurant). It gives the feeling that you are not the MC, but someone else in the room watching.  If you are telling a story through the MC's eyes,  it would be a lot better with more POV, and if the characters look directly at you, and not everywhere else.  Definitely not all the time, but more times than not, otherwise it's pretty hard to connect with any of the characters.

Not to say the camera angles are bad, they are pretty good, thus the initial statement, I just think it's a bit too many.

The sex scenes are a bit too quick, with a bit too much talk during the action.  Better off to have a narrative here instead of a conversation.

like a lot of novels here, it's a great start, with no finish.